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    Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Sun Jun 29, 2014 4:25 am

    Skill Name: Doku Doku no Mi (Venom Venom Fruit)
    Skill Type: Paramecia type Devil fruit
    Skill Information: The Doku Doku no Mi is a blue egg shaped devil fruit with hypnotizing swirls of different shades of blue and a black stem. It gives the user the ability to produce and control different types of poisons.
    Skill Strengths:
      The user and produce and control various types of poisons.
      The user is immune to all types of poisons.
      The user can weaken opponents by affecting their senses

    Skill Weaknesses:
      Water, sea stone, haki
      Fire can neutralize liquid poisons
      Some non-organic materials are resistant to the poison


    Abilities Lvl 1:

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Gas Bullet
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user blows a poison bubble bullet which when impacted on an opponent acts as a tear gas.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
      Opponent experiences a decrease in endurance by 5 for 2 posts
      Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts
      Can fire up to 15 bullets

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
      Weak against fire
      User loses endurance by 5 for 2 posts
      User has to charge the attack before using it. This takes up a post


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Cloud
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Short Range/5 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creates a poison cloud which engulfs opponents.  
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
      The opponents experience 1st degree burns for 3 posts
      Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts
      Opponent experiences decrease in speed by 5 for 2 posts

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
      The poison cloud only lasts for two posts
      Can be blown away by level 1 skills of the air element
      Also hurts allies


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Barrier
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defense
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user produces large amounts of liquid poison from the body which the user manipulates to surround them. It is seven feet high.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
      The opponent will lose their strength by 5 for 3  posts
      Level 1 non-haki based weapons will corrode
      Barrier completely surrounds user quickly


    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
      Weak against weapons embedded with haki
      Vulnerable to fire
      User loses endurance by 5 for 3 posts


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Armour
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defense
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user produces liquid poison from the body which is manipulated to cover the user's body.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
      Causes 1st degree burns when touched which lasts for 2 posts
      Level 1 non haki-based weapons will corrode
      Armour forms quickly

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
      Fire neutralizes the ability of the armour
      The user is unable to use another skill while this ability is active
      Weak against weapons embedded with haki, sea stone, salt


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Arrow
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creases an arrow made of poison by blowing the arrows from their mouth. The arrows are fired at high speed and when it hits opponents it affects their nervous system
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
      Speed increases by 5 for user for 2 posts
      Opponents experience a decrease in speed by 5 for 2 posts
      The arrow will cause a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
      Arrow can be blocked by shield of haki, sea-stone, salt, water
      Arrow can be blocked by shield of fire
      User can only fire 5 arrows at a time



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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Mon Jun 30, 2014 10:42 pm

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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Wed Jul 02, 2014 7:00 pm

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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Rylan the Prodigy on Fri Jul 04, 2014 6:42 am

    Corrections are in red.

    Kairan wrote:Skill Name: Doku Doku no Mi (Venom Venom Fruit)
    Skill Type: Paramecia type Devil fruit
    Skill Information: The Doku Doku no Mi is a blue egg shaped devil fruit with hypnotizing swirls of different shades of blue and a black stem. It gives the user the ability to produce and control different types of poisons.
    Skill Strengths:

      The user and produce and control various types of poisons.


      The user is immune to all types of poisons.


      The user can weaken opponents -"weaken opponents", how can he weaken the opponents? And if so do they lose their stats? If that's the case add how much they lose.

    Skill Weaknesses:

      Water, sea stone, haki


      fire can neutralize liquid poisons


      some non-organic materials are resistant to the poison


    Abilities Lvl 1:

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Gas Bullet
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user blows a poison bubble bullet which when impacted on an opponent acts as a tear gas.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Opponent sneezes uncontrollably for 2 posts


      Opponent experiences temporary blindness for 2 posts -This effect is not allowed at level 1, make a new one.


      Can fire up to 15 bullets

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Weak against fire


      User loses endurance by 5


      User has to be still to form bullets


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Cloud
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Short Range/5 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creates a poison cloud which engulfs opponents.  
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      The opponents experience 1st degree burns -State how long they experience the burn.


      Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 -For how long does the stat decrease last?


      Opponent experiences decrease in speed by 5 -For how long does the stat decrease last?

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      The poison cloud only lasts for two posts


      Can be blown away


      Also hurts allies


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Barrier
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defense
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts <- (Look for your weakness to understand what this is for.
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creates a liquid barrier made of poison that is seven feet high.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      The opponent will lose their strength if they touch it -By how much? And for how long?


      Non-haki based weapons will corrode


      Barrier grows quickly -What do you mean with grows quickly?

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Weak against weapons embedded with haki


      Vulnerable to fire


      Only lasts for 2 posts -This should be stated where the '<-' mark is. Create a new weakness.


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Armour
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defense
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: Creates a liquid poison armour around the user's body
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Causes 1st degree burns when touched -For how long?


      Non haki-based weapons will corrode


      Armour forms quickly

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      The armour is vulnerable to fire


      It requires complete concentration from user or it will dissipate


      Weak against weapons embedded with haki


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Arrow
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creases an arrow made of poison
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Finesse increases by 5 for user-For how long?


      Opponents experience a decrease in speed by 5 -For how long?


      The arrow will cause a decrease in strength by 5 -For how long?

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Arrow can be blocked by shield of haki


      Arrow can be blocked by shield of fire


      User can only fire 5 arrows

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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Mon Jul 07, 2014 7:17 pm

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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Wed Jul 09, 2014 8:24 pm

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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Storm Runner on Thu Jul 10, 2014 9:42 am

    corrections in red

    Kairan wrote:Skill Name: Doku Doku no Mi (Venom Venom Fruit)
    Skill Type: Paramecia type Devil fruit
    Skill Information: The Doku Doku no Mi is a blue egg shaped devil fruit with hypnotizing swirls of different shades of blue and a black stem. It gives the user the ability to produce and control different types of poisons.
    Skill Strengths:

      The user and produce and control various types of poisons.


      The user is immune to all types of poisons.


      The user can weaken opponents by affecting their senses

    Skill Weaknesses:

      Water, sea stone, haki


      Fire can neutralize liquid poisons


      Some non-organic materials are resistant to the poison


    Abilities Lvl 1:

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Gas Bullet
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user blows a poison bubble bullet which when impacted on an opponent acts as a tear gas.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Opponent sneezes uncontrollably for 2 posts
    -this applies to npc's only as it does not state any effect it would have on the target's stats.

      Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts


      Can fire up to 15 bullets

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Weak against fire


      User loses endurance by 5
    -this will have to be for two posts

      User has to be still to form bullets
    -so does this mean he has to charge the attack for a post before using it?

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Cloud
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Short Range/5 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creates a poison cloud which engulfs opponents. -how does he do this please give more detail
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      The opponents experience 1st degree burns for 3 posts


      Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts


      Opponent experiences decrease in speed by 5 for 2 posts

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      The poison cloud only lasts for two posts


      Can be blown away
    -add in at the end "by level 1 skills of the air element."


      Also hurts allies


    color=#ff0000]*you gained +10 all together for two posts in your strength, you need to have a -10 for two posts in your weaknesses somehow be it split into two -5 or what ever.[/color]

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Barrier
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defense
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creates a liquid barrier made of poison that is seven feet high. -how does he do this please give more detail
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      The opponent will lose their strength by 5 for 3  posts


      Non-haki based weapons will corrode
    -change this to level 1 non-haki based and non-salt covered weapons will corrode.


      Barrier completely surrounds user quickly


    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Weak against weapons embedded with haki
    [color=#ff0000] -please add in all your standard df weaknesses (haki, sea-prism stone, salt, water.) and your element weaknesses[color]


      Vulnerable to fire


      User loses endurance by 5 for 3 posts


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Armour
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defence
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: Creates a liquid poison armour around the user's body
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
      -how does he do this please give more detail, also venom is not acid so how can it corrode objects?
      Causes 1st degree burns when touched which lasts for 2 posts


      Non haki-based weapons will corrode
    -change this to level 1 non-haki based and non-salt covered weapons will corrode.

      Armour forms quickly
    -how fast is quickly? also this would not apply pvp unless it gives a + speed boost. you don't need it just saying.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      The armour is vulnerable to fire
    -how does he do this please give more detail

      It requires complete concentration from user or it will dissipate
    -does that mean the user can use no other skill while this one is in effect? please explain more.

      Weak against weapons embedded with haki
    [color=#ff0000] -please add in all your standard df weaknesses (haki, sea-prism stone, salt, water.) and your element weaknesses

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Arrow
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creases an arrow made of poison -how does he do this please give more detail
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Finesse increases by 5 for user for 2 posts
    -why does this increase? please give more detail

      Opponents experience a decrease in speed by 5 for 2 posts
    -why does this decrease? please give more detail

      The arrow will cause a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts
    -why does this decrease? please give more detail
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Arrow can be blocked by shield of haki
    -please add in all your standard df weaknesses (haki, sea-prism stone, salt, water.)

      Arrow can be blocked by shield of fire


      User can only fire 5 arrows
    -please go into more detail. is it five arrows at a time or something?
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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Thu Jul 17, 2014 9:38 pm

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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Thu Jul 17, 2014 9:41 pm

    Corrosive poisons do exist.
    For the poison arrow..it was supposed to be speed not finesse and I was mainly using a description of Magellan's abilities and they say he fires his bullets at high speeds. For the part about how the opponent has a decrease in speed and strength I figured the reason was already in the ability description.
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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Storm Runner on Sat Jul 19, 2014 7:34 pm

    Kairan wrote:Corrosive poisons do exist.
    For the poison arrow..it was supposed to be speed not finesse and I was mainly using a description of Magellan's abilities and they say he fires his bullets at high speeds. For the part about how the opponent has a decrease in speed and strength I figured the reason was already in the ability description.
    ^^okay well then I would ask you to list the ph strength of the poison for rank 1, 2 and 3. Also just to let you know Magellan was a logia user and would be a rank 3 if he was on this site.

    Kairan wrote:Skill Name: Doku Doku no Mi (Venom Venom Fruit)
    Skill Type: Paramecia type Devil fruit
    Skill Information: The Doku Doku no Mi is a blue egg shaped devil fruit with hypnotizing swirls of different shades of blue and a black stem. It gives the user the ability to produce and control different types of poisons.
    Skill Strengths:

      The user and produce and control various types of poisons.


      The user is immune to all types of poisons.


      The user can weaken opponents by affecting their senses

    Skill Weaknesses:

      Water, sea stone, haki


      Fire can neutralize liquid poisons
    -how does fire neutralize the poison?

      Some non-organic materials are resistant to the poison
    -can you list a few please.
    ^^Can you please add an elemental strength, remember you are of the darkness element.^^

    Abilities Lvl 1:

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Gas Bullet
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user blows a poison bubble bullet which when impacted on an opponent acts as a tear gas.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Opponent experiences a decrease in endurance by 5 for 2 posts
    -why does the Opponent experiences a decrease in endurance by 5 for 2 posts, either explain this in the ability's description or add it into your strengths.

      Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts
    -why does the Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts, either explain this in the ability's description or add it into your strengths.

      Can fire up to 15 bullets
    -The abilities description does not state this to be a multi-hit ability.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Weak against fire
    -how is it weak? please give more detail.

      User loses endurance by 5 for 2 posts
    -please add another -5 stat for 2 post or raise it from 5 to 10 to balance out your strength.

      User has to charge the attack before using it. This takes up a post



    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Cloud
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Short Range/5 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creates a poison cloud which engulfs opponents.  
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      The opponents experience 1st degree burns for 3 posts
    -why does the opponent experiences a 1st degree burns for 3 posts, either explain this in the ability's description or add it into your strengths.

      Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts
    -why does the opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts, either explain this in the ability's description or add it into your strengths.

      Opponent experiences decrease in speed by 5 for 2 posts
    -why does the opponent experiences a decrease in speed by 5 for 2 posts, either explain this in the ability's description or add it into your strengths.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      The poison cloud only lasts for two posts


      Can be blown away by level 1 skills of the air element


      Also hurts allies
    ] -how does it harm allies?

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Barrier
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defence
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2 posts -raise this to 3.
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user produces large amounts of liquid poison from the body which the user manipulates to surround them. It is seven feet high. -please change feet to metres
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      The opponent will lose their strength by 5 for 3  posts
    -why does the opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 3, either explain this in the ability's description or add it into your strengths.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Level 1 non-haki based weapons will corrode
    -if they corrode how long does it take to break them?

      Barrier completely surrounds user quickly


    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Weak against weapons embedded with haki
    -how is it weak? Either explain this in the ability's description or add it into your strengths.


      Vulnerable to fire
    -how is it vulnerable to fire?

      User loses endurance by 5 for 3 posts
    -wouldn't a shield/wall/barrier increase endurance?

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Armour
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defence
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user produces liquid poison from the body which is manipulated to cover the user's body.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Causes 1st degree burns when touched which lasts for 2 posts
    -why does the opponent get a 1st degree burns when touched, either explain this in the ability's description or add it into your strengths.

      Level 1 non haki-based weapons will corrode
    -if they corrode how long does it take to break them?

      Armour forms quickly

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Fire neutralizes the ability of the armour
    -how is it neutralized by fire?

      The user is unable to use another skill while this ability is active
    -this would only apply to your Devil Fruit powers/skills.

      Weak against weapons embedded with haki, sea stone, salt
    -this is a over all devil fruit weakness please change this weakness.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Arrow
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creates an arrow made of poison by blowing the arrows from their mouth. The arrows are fired at high speed and when it hits opponents it affects their nervous system
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Speed increases by 5 for user for 2 posts
    -why does the opponent get a 1st degree burns when touched, either explain this in the ability's description or add it into your strengths.

      Opponents experience a decrease in speed by 5 for 2 posts


      The arrow will cause a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Arrow can be blocked by shield of haki, sea-stone, salt, water
    -this is a overall devil fruit weakness, please change it.


      Arrow can be blocked by shield of fire


      User can only fire 5 arrows at a time



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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Tue Jul 22, 2014 10:17 pm

    I will have to change the fire part won't I? I had always assume it evaporated but wouldn't that create fumes instead. Can you explain the element part please? Oh and Magellan would be rank 3 but do I have to be? My ability was based off his but is not completely his.
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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Fisher D. Conrad on Thu Aug 07, 2014 6:47 am

    I'm supposed to be taking over now, so I'll review you on the morrow. Just letting you know.
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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Thu Aug 07, 2014 6:50 am

    Okie dokie
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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Fisher D. Conrad on Thu Aug 07, 2014 10:36 pm

    Kairan wrote:Skill Name: Doku Doku no Mi (Venom Venom Fruit)
    Skill Type: Paramecia type Devil fruit
    Skill Information: The Doku Doku no Mi is a blue egg shaped devil fruit with hypnotizing swirls of different shades of blue and a black stem. It gives the user the ability to produce and control different types of poisons.
    Skill Strengths:

      The user and produce and control various types of poisons.


      The user is immune to all types of poisons.


      The user can weaken opponents by affecting their senses

    Skill Weaknesses:

      Water, sea stone, haki


      Fire can neutralize liquid poisons


      Some non-organic materials are resistant to the poison

    I've never seen such accurate information before. Well, I have, but that doesn't change the accuracy of this information in the slightest. You are missing your elemental strengths and weaknesses, however. Adding those would make this list all the more accurate.

    Accurate wrote:
    Abilities Lvl 1:

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Gas Bullet
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user blows a poison bubble bullet which when impacted on an opponent acts as a tear gas.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Opponent experiences a decrease in endurance by 5 for 2 posts


      Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts


      Can fire up to 15 bullets

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Weak against fire


      User loses endurance by 5 for 2 posts


      User has to charge the attack before using it. This takes up a post

    Listing fire as a weaknesses is redundant, since it's already a skill weakness. You're going to need another (assuming you have this as a weakness on all of them, so pretend I've said this for each skill).

    Since it takes a full post to charge, your cooldown could easily pass as 2.

    Keepin' it Cool wrote:Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Cloud
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Short Range/5 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creates a poison cloud which engulfs opponents.  
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      The opponents experience 1st degree burns for 3 posts


      Opponent experiences a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts


      Opponent experiences decrease in speed by 5 for 2 posts

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      The poison cloud only lasts for two posts


      Can be blown away by level 1 skills of the air element


      Also hurts allies

    Can this cloud explode if hit by fire? That could be something worth listing as either or both a strength and a weakness.

    Tasty wrote:Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Barrier
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defense
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user produces large amounts of liquid poison from the body which the user manipulates to surround them. It is seven feet high.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      The opponent will lose their strength by 5 for 3  posts


      Level 1 non-haki based weapons will corrode


      Barrier completely surrounds user quickly


    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Weak against weapons embedded with haki


      Vulnerable to fire


      User loses endurance by 5 for 3 posts

    There should be some reason why they lose strength. At least make it so they have to touch them.

    I'm also gathering this doesn't actually protect you from damage, but just hurts people for hurting you. Is that right?

    Nom wrote:Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Armour
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Support/Defense
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user produces liquid poison from the body which is manipulated to cover the user's body.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Causes 1st degree burns when touched which lasts for 2 posts


      Level 1 non haki-based weapons will corrode


      Armour forms quickly

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Fire neutralizes the ability of the armour


      The user is unable to use another skill while this ability is active


      Weak against weapons embedded with haki, sea stone, salt

    What's this actually do? Because it seems pretty much the same as the last one. The Devil Fruit weaknesses are also redundant, same as the fire mentioned previously.

    Don't be That Guy wrote:Ability Lvl 1 Name: Poison Arrow
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Middle Range/20 metre radius
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 3 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user creases an arrow made of poison by blowing the arrows from their mouth. The arrows are fired at high speed and when it hits opponents it affects their nervous system
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:

      Speed increases by 5 for user for 2 posts


      Opponents experience a decrease in speed by 5 for 2 posts


      The arrow will cause a decrease in strength by 5 for 2 posts

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:

      Arrow can be blocked by shield of haki, sea-stone, salt, water


      Arrow can be blocked by shield of fire


      User can only fire 5 arrows at a time


    The number of arrows isn't really a weakness. That's more of a strength.

    Redundant weaknesses are redundant.

    Genuine weaknesses are vastly outnumbered by strengths. You gain stats and the opponent loses a bunch. Needs to be evened out.
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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Kairan on Sat Aug 16, 2014 1:42 am

    Sorry for the late reply and thanks for the review. I don't suppose you could suggest an elemental strength and weakness for me please. The difference between the barrier and armour id that barrier can be used for someone else. Hmm yup I really need some better weaknesses.
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    Re: Doku Doku no Mi

    Post by Fisher D. Conrad on Sat Aug 16, 2014 1:44 am

    Elemental weaknesses are listed on the element chart. It's in the rules area.

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