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    Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

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    Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Kanzaki on Mon Jun 30, 2014 1:38 am

    Skill Name: Iaidō
    Skill Type:One sword Melee (0-3 meters)
    Skill Information: The term Iaidō (居合道) refers to a specific style of Swordsmanship  that is concerned with the smooth, controlled movements of drawing the sword from its scabbard, striking or cutting an opponent, removing blood from the blade, and then replacing the sword in the scabbard. The linear motion and force applied to draw the sword from the scabbard results in slashes that are faster and stronger than ones executed with the sword already drawn.
    Skill Strengths:
    - With The sword being in its sheath it makes it easier to attack in a certain spot.
    - User easily slashes though light lv1 armour. (Strength is removed when sword is drawn)
    - If mastered can piece though stone.
    Skill Weaknesses:
    - User is open to attacks before and after attacking -10 reflex. (Weakness is removed when sword is drawn)
    - Cannot use ability's or attack if not re-shealthed. (This doesnt not apply to devil fruit.)
    - having the sword drawn removes one of the strengths.


    Ability Lvl 1 Name:Iai Beheading
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Close range (0-3 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: Adhering to the principles of Iaidō, the user performs a quick and powerful slash aimed at here opponents neck with their sword, before immediately resheathing the blade afterwards.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User slashes slightly faster then normally +5 Speed
    - user slashes though lv1 armor +5 strength for one post
    - Can cut heads off of large monsters. (NPC non boss effect, it will come into effect if you defeat a boss with this skill.)
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - The skill can be easily blocked by someone that has higher reflexes (10 Reflex Advantage)
    - User leaves themselves open before and after striking. -15 reflex (1 post)
    - User cannot Use moves in succession, attack, or defend after use for 1 post.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Rupture
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Melee close range (0-3 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:The user takes the sheath of there wast and holds there sword in its sheath And when the Opposition comes into range the user Swings he blade horizontal manner as to intend to cut the person in half.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User swings their sword slightly faster to strike the incoming enemy(Sword +5 speed for swing)
    - User is ready to be attacked if move does not hit.  +5 endurance for one post
    - Can cut though lv 1 heavy armor.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - This move has very short range so the user needs to be almost touching the opponent. (1 meter)
    - After user takes a attack the opponent has a higher speed they can get in another attack without being stopped by the user. (Third party can stop the attack) (20 speed advantage)
    - If dodged user will lose sight of the enemy. -10 reflex for one post

    (Side Note) This is easily counted if they opponent stays at a range and avoids getting in close quarters.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Flash
    Ability Lvl 1 Type:Mid range (0- 15 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 5 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user holds there sheathed sword then charges there enemy and at the last moment unsheathe there sword with such speed it creates a shockwave that is used on the enemy's equipment they blocked with. (does not apply if enemy doges.)
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User Strikes with speed to help with there attack. (+15 Speed for 1 post)
    - User hits with such force it makes the opponent that has less strength to stumble back. (same or 10 str disadv do not stumble back)
    - Cuts though Lvl one light and medium armour.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - User takes recoil damage that cause great pain in the users limbs. (-5 endurance) for 3 post
    - User cannot move very well after use (-5 speed) (-5 reflex) for 4 post
    - Cant cut heavy armor.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Strong Strike Shockwave Slash
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Mid range (0-10 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 6 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:The user grabs the shelth with the sword in it and then un-sheaths there sword with speed that it sends a wave of air that makes an opponent move 2 meters back.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - Can Cut medium Lv 1 amour and Lv 1 light armour
    - Cant be block unless opponent has a higher strength. (2 strength advantage)
    - Goes on for 10 meters and will stop at the first thing it hits.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - Caused great stain on the arm that does this move and is unable to use that limb for 2 posts.
    - User Stumbles back after the attack is released and cant respond the post after use.
    - User cant defend or attack after use

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Crippling strike
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: melee Close range (0-3 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: can only use once per thread after use.
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user strikes with the last of there strength to destroy there opponent.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User swings with all there might. (+10 Strength)
    - User can pierce though heavy armor.
    - User can pierce though steel.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - User takes great strain on her body that cause high amounts of fatigue that cause the use not to be able move for the rest of the thread after use. -10 endurance.
    - This Move breaks the user's arm after use from striking with all there might. (User must write a recovery thread on there ship or in a room where its a safe place to do this with at least 500 words Or if someone joins in say the ships doctor then the user must write at least 200 words for each post.)
    - User cannot use this for a first attack in a PVP thread it needs to be used after 5 or more posts.


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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Kanzaki on Mon Jun 30, 2014 6:42 pm

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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Storm Runner on Mon Jun 30, 2014 8:14 pm

    okay your allowed 5 level 1 abilities and I think you might have gotten confused on how to register your skill, you register your primary skill which has it's own thread in your case this will be your Tori Tori no mi. once you make that you can make your secondary skill in another topic which seems to be a sword style. if you need more help feel free to pm me.


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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Kanzaki on Mon Jun 30, 2014 8:45 pm

    Edited


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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Kanzaki on Tue Jul 01, 2014 10:50 pm

    I got rid of my speed buff skill and added Almighty Blade


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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Storm Runner on Wed Jul 02, 2014 7:41 am

    Spelling corrections and everything that needs to be addressed is in red.

    All skills and its moves/abilities must have a minimum three strengths and weaknesses. Please edit your range in as shown in this example and according to the sites pre-set range classification Close range 0-10 meters. Mid range, 15-25 and long range 30-40.

    Gean Kasme wrote:Skill Name: Swordsmen -Iaidō goes here as it is the name of a type of sword style
    Skill Type:Iaidō -One Sword Style goes here as it is this tis the type of skill Iaidō
    Skill Information: The term Iaidō (居合道) refers to a specific style of Swordsmanship  that is concerned with the smooth, controlled movements of drawing the sword from its scabbard, striking or cutting an opponent, removing blood from the blade, and then replacing the sword in the scabbard. The linear motion and force applied to draw the sword from the scabbard results in slashes that are faster and stronger than ones executed with the sword already drawn.
    Skill Strengths:
    - It's stronger then an already drawn sword. - a fighting style wouldn't effect the actual strength of the blade of a sword.
    - It's faster then a drawn sword. - Speed comes down to your stats not the sword (with the exception of lv2 and lv3 weapons).
    - If mastered can piece though stone.
    Skill Weaknesses:
    - Sword Must be re-sheathed before second use. -Your Third weakness is basically the same as it, make a new weakness.
    - Cannot be used in secession -Does this mean you need to wait a post after using an Iaidō skill? please explain more.
    - Cannot use skills if not re-sheathed (This does not include Almighty blade)


    Ability Lvl 1 Name:Iai Beheading
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Close range
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: Adhering to the principles of Iaidō, the user performs a quick and powerful slash with their sword in order to cut the intended target, before immediately re-sheathing the blade afterwards. -How is this beheading? you need more detail.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - Very fast. +5 reflex -rephrase to during this attack the user gains +5 speed.' Also fast=speed and also if you gain +5 in a strength you must have a -5 in your weakness.
    - Very hard to dodge. -how is it hard to dodge?
    - Can cut heads off of large monsters. -this is going to be an NPC non boss effect, it will come into effect if you defeat a boss with this skill. add this info to the description or to this strength.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - Cannot be used in succession. *
    - User cannot attack after uses. *
    - User cannot defend after use *

    * These three weaknesses basically are all the same thing new ones are needed

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Rupture
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Melee
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:The user violently swings their sword with the intention of striking an approaching opponent. -Where is the sheathed aspect of this skill? more information is needed
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - Very fast (Sword +10 speed -rephrase to during this attack the user gains +10 speed.' Also fast=speed and also if you gain +10 in a strength you must have a -10 in your weakness.
    - Very hard to dodge -how is it hard to dodge?
    - Can cut though heavy armour -Change this to lv1 heavy armour as lv2/3 are unable to be destroyed
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - Easily countered -this will come down to stats during boss fights and pvp please make a new weakness
    - Very short range. 3 meters. -new weakness needed
    - Cant defend after use -How long does this last for?

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Flash
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Range
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 5 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:A swift ranged attack where the user swings their sword releasing a shockwave from the force released. (Depending on how much strength the user has) -Please explain how the shockwave is made? is it made by cutting though the air fast enough or something? Also where is the sheathed aspect of this skill? more information is needed
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - Ranged attack 15 meters -make a new strength
    - Cannot be blocked -This will only apply to npc characters that are not bosses and the ones that do not have stats.
    - Cuts though medium armour and below. -Change this to lv1 light and medium armour as lv2/3 are unable to be destroyed
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - Cause High amounts of fatigue -does this mean the user suffers a recoil damage or minus endurance for a post? more information please
    - User cannot move very well after use (-10 speed) -You need a +10 in your Strengths, also your reflex would also suffer
    - Cant cut heavy armour (-10 Strength) -you don't need to lose -10 in this weakness

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Strong Strike Shockwave Slash
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Melee
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 6 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:The user Does a strong slash to the opponent with a sword which sends a powerful shockwave in all directions. -Please explain how the shockwave is made? is it made by cutting though the air fast enough or something? Also where is the sheathed aspect of this skill? more information is needed
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    -Hard to block -please make this a complete sentence
    -Area of effect of 10 meters. -new weakness needed
    -Destroys Light armour -Change this to lv1 light armour as lv2/3 are unable to be destroyed
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - User takes internal Damage from the shock wave it produces -does this mean the user suffers a recoil damage or minus endurance for a post? more information please
    - User takes major fatigue. (-10 speed for 1 post after use) -fatigue is usually linked to endurance not speed is it not?
    - User cant defend after use -for how long does this last?

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Almighty Blade
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: melee
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: Duration 5 posts, Cooldown can only use once per 3 threads after use.
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: User makes a seal that appears to be floating in the air. the user makes a left diagonal line that goes right, a right diagonal line that goes left, makes one that goes straight in the centre, then the user shoves there sword though the centre and the user automatically Equips a kimono and an extended blade to double its range, double its weight, and double its damage.
    Spoiler:

    Blade and kimono



    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User has extended range. from 3 meters to 7
    - User can pierce though heavy armor.
    - User can pierce though steel.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - User takes great strain on her body that cause high amounts of fatigue that cause the use not to be able move for the rest of the thread after duration is gone.
    - Causes the user to have internal bleeding from hold her blade.
    - It breaks the arm of the arm that swings and holds the blade after duration.
    - User cannot use the Iaidō fighting style with this blade or any other abilitys.
    - Certain conditions must be met,
        1. Can only be used as a last resort.
        2. Can only be used to to defend others
        3. Can only be used for the ones she cares about.

    ^^^The final skill mentioned above sounds more like something a divine weapon would do unless you use magic^^^
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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Kanzaki on Thu Jul 03, 2014 12:05 am

    Edited and i completly redid i think 2 or 3 of my abilitys


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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Storm Runner on Thu Jul 03, 2014 4:48 am

    Please edit your skill to add in it's range in as shown in this example below and according to the sites pre-set range classification Close range 0-10 meters. Mid range, 15-25 and long range 30-40.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Zoom-Zoom Bullet
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Melee mid/close ranged (0 - 20 metres)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2


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    Post by Kanzaki on Thu Jul 03, 2014 6:11 am

    Edited


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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Storm Runner on Fri Jul 04, 2014 8:20 am

    you didn't correct the spelling corrections I gave you last time, other corrections in red

    Gean Kasme wrote:Skill Name: Iaidō
    Skill Type:One sword Melee (0-3 meters)
    Skill Information: The term Iaidō (居合道) refers to a specific style of Swordsmanship  that is concerned with the smooth, controlled movements of drawing the sword from its scabbard, striking or cutting an opponent, removing blood from the blade, and then replacing the sword in the scabbard. The linear motion and force applied to draw the sword from the scabbard results in slashes that are faster and stronger than ones executed with the sword already drawn.
    Skill Strengths:
    - With The sword being in its sheath it makes it easier to attack in a certain spot. +5 finesse*
    - Strong vs lv1 light armor +10 strength. *
    - If mastered can piece though stone.
    Skill Weaknesses:
    - User is open before and after attacking -10 reflex.*
    - User most wait one post before using a skill after attacking
    - Cannot use ability's or attack if not re-shealthed (This does not include Almighty blade)
    - having the sword drawn removes one of the strengths. you will need to state strength is removed in each skill when the sword is drawn.

    * you cannot gain permanent stat buffs/debuffs from your skill, the can be activated by elemental opponents but other wise they aren't allowed.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name:Iai Beheading
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Close range (0-3 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: Adhering to the principles of Iaidō, the user performs a quick and powerful slash aimed at here opponents neck with their sword, before immediately resheathing the blade afterwards.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - Very fast. +5 Speed -extend this please
    - user slashes though lv1 armor +5 strength -for how long does the -5 last?
    - Can cut heads off of large monsters. (NPC non boss effect, it will come into effect if you defeat a boss with this skill.)
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - Can be easily blocked or dodged -how?
    - User leaves themselves open before and after striking. -15 reflex -for how long does the -15 last?
    - User cannot Use moves in succession, attack, or defend after use. -for how long until they can attack after using this skill?


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Rupture
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Melee close range (0-3 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:The user holds there Sheathed sword And when Opposition comes into range the user Swings he blade horizontal manner as to intend to cut the person in half.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - Very fast. (Sword +5 speed for swing)
    - User is ready to be attacked if move does not hit.  +5 endurance -for how long does the +5 last?
    - Can cut though lv 1 heavy armor.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - Very short range. 3 meters. -a new weakness is needed here?
    - Cant defend after use -this contradicts your second strength change it
    - If dodged user will lose sight of the enemy. -10 reflex -for how long does the -10 last?


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Flash
    Ability Lvl 1 Type:Mid range (0- 15 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 5 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user holds there sheathed sword then charges there enemy and at the last moment unsheathe there sword with such speed it creates a shockwave that is used on the enemy's equipment they blocked with. (does not apply if enemy doges.)
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User Strikes with speed to help with there attack. (+15 Speed)
    - User stuns the limb that comes into contact with the shockwave for one post. -stunning isn't allowed at lv 1 sorry
    - Cuts though Lvl one light and medium armour.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - User takes recoil damage that cause great pain in the users limbs. (-5 endurance) -for how long does the -5 last?
    - User cannot move very well after use (-10 speed) (-5 reflex) -for how long does the -15 last? also change -10 speed to -5
    - Cant cut heavy armor.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Strong Strike Shockwave Slash
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Mid range (0-17 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 6 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:The user grabs the shelth with the sword in it and then un-sheaths there sword with speed that it sends a wave of air that makes an opponent move 2 meters back.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - Can Cut medium lv 1 amour and Lvv 1 light armour
    - Cant be blocked except by solid objects -please reword this
    - Goes in a straight line for 10 meters -how is this a strength?
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - Caused great stain on the arm that does this move and is unable to use that limb for 2 posts.
    - User's arm that holds the Sheath takes damage.  (-10 Endurance for that arm for 1 post after use) -each body part doesn't have its own endurance stat, also you need to have a +10 in strength
    - User cant defend or attack after use -for how long does it last?
    - Solid objects block this move. -explain in more detail.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Crippling swing
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: melee Close range (0-3 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: can only use once per 3 threads after use. -this is a little extreme you can lower the cool-down
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user puts all there strength into this one last swing to destroy there opponent.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User swings with all there might. (+10 Strength)
    - User can pierce though heavy armor.
    - User can pierce though steel.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - User takes great strain on her body that cause high amounts of fatigue that cause the use not to be able move for the rest of the thread after use. -so what does that mean minus 10 endurance or something after the use of this skill?
    - This Move breaks the user's arm after use from swinging with all there might
    - User cannot use the Iaidō fighting style with this move or any other ability's. -but isn't this move apart of your Iaidō fighting style skills? please explain in more detail or change it.
    - Can only use this move as a last resort. -this isn't a skill weakness its the users choice, please change it.
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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Kanzaki on Sat Jul 19, 2014 2:22 pm

    I FINALLY EDITED IT!!!


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    Re: Gean's Sword Skills [Primary] [W.I.P]

    Post by Storm Runner on Mon Jul 21, 2014 8:41 am

    all corrections in red but please go over your spelling and grammar with a fine toothed comb.

    Gean Kasme wrote:Skill Name: Iaidō
    Skill Type:One sword Melee (0-3 meters)
    Skill Information: The term Iaidō (居合道) refers to a specific style of Swordsmanship  that is concerned with the smooth, controlled movements of drawing the sword from its scabbard, striking or cutting an opponent, removing blood from the blade, and then replacing the sword in the scabbard. The linear motion and force applied to draw the sword from the scabbard results in slashes that are faster and stronger than ones executed with the sword already drawn.
    Skill Strengths:
    - With The sword being in its sheath it makes it easier to attack in a certain spot. +5 finesse -you cannot gain permanent stat buffs/de-buffs from your skill, remove this stat bouns.
    - Strong vs lv1 light armor +10 strength. (Strength is removed when sword is drawn) -can you go into more detail of what is meant by strong vs lv1 light armour.
    - If mastered can piece though stone.
    Skill Weaknesses:
    - User is open before and after attacking -10 reflex. (Weakness is removed when sword is drawn) -please try re-wording this
    - User most wait one post before using a skill after attacking
    - Cannot use ability's or attack if not re-sheathed (This does not include Almighty blade) -this would not apply to your Devil Fruit skill, and please re-word this to say "The user cannot use another Iaidō sword skill until the user has re-sheathed the sword"
    - having the sword drawn removes one of the strengths. -you will need to state strength is removed in each skill when the sword is drawn.


    Ability Lvl 1 Name:Iai Beheading
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Close range (0-3 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 2 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: Adhering to the principles of Iaidō, the user performs a quick and powerful slash aimed at here opponents neck with their sword, before immediately resheathing the blade afterwards.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User slashes slightly faster then normally +5 Speed -how does the user slashes slightly faster then normally? please explain in the Ability description or in the strength
    - user slashes though lv1 armor +5 strength for one post -how does the user have a +5 strength for one post after slashing through lv1 armour? please explain in the Ability description or in the strength
    - Can cut heads off of large monsters. (NPC non boss effect, it will come into effect if you defeat a boss with this skill.)
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - The skill can be easily blocked by someone that has higher reflexes (10 Reflex Advantage)
    - User leaves themselves open before and after striking. -15 reflex (1 post) -which post is the 1 post when you loose -15 reflex? the post before you attack or the first post during your cool down?
    - User cannot Use moves in succession, attack, or defend after use for 1 post. -reword this to be "After preforming the beheading technique the user is unable to defend herself from attacks for one post as she re-sheaths her katana."


    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Rupture
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Melee close range (0-3 meters) -change this to 1 meter as it is stated below in your weaknesses
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 4 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:The user takes the sheath of there wast and holds there sword in its sheath And when the Opposition comes into range the user Swings he blade horizontal manner as to intend to cut the person in half.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User swings their sword slightly faster to strike the incoming enemy(Sword +5 speed for swing) -how does the user slashes slightly faster then normally? please explain in the Ability description or in the strength
    - User is ready to be attacked if move does not hit.  +5 endurance for one post
    - Can cut though lv 1 heavy armour.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - This move has very short range so the user needs to be almost touching the opponent. (1 meter)
    - After user takes a attack the opponent has a higher speed they can get in another attack without being stopped by the user. (Third party can stop the attack) (20 speed advantage) -how does the opponent has a higher speed after the attack and how can a third party stop the attack? please explain in the Ability description or in the strength. Also lower 10 and change it to say -10 speed.
    - If dodged user will lose sight of the enemy. -10 reflex for one post -change the second half to say "-10 reflex for one post if the attack is dodged or blocked"
    (Side Note) This is easily counted if they opponent stays at a range and avoids getting in close quarters.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Flash
    Ability Lvl 1 Type:Mid range (0- 15 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 5 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user holds there sheathed sword then charges there enemy and at the last moment unsheathe there sword with such speed it creates a shockwave that is used on the enemy's equipment they blocked with. (does not apply if enemy doges.)
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User Strikes with speed to help with there attack. (+15 Speed for 1 post) -how does the user slashes slightly faster then normally? please explain in the Ability description or in the strength. Also lower the +15 to +10
    - User hits with such force it makes the opponent that has less strength to stumble back. (same or 10 str disadv do not stumble back) -please re-word what is within the Parentheses
    - Cuts though Lvl one light and medium armour.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - User takes recoil damage that cause great pain in the users limbs. (-5 endurance) for 3 post
    - User cannot move very well after use (-5 speed) (-5 reflex) for 4 post -Why is the user able to move very well after use? please explain in the Ability description or in the strength.
    - Cant cut heavy armor.

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Strong Strike Shockwave Slash
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: Mid range (0-10 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: 6 posts
    Ability Lvl 1 Description:The user grabs the shelth with the sword in it and then un-sheaths there sword with speed that it sends a wave of air that makes an opponent move 2 meters back.
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - Can Cut medium Lv 1 amour and Lv 1 light armour
    - Cant be block unless opponent has a higher strength. (2 strength advantage) -Why can't it be blocked unless the opponent has higher strength stats then the user? please explain in the Ability description or in the strength.
    - Goes on for 10 meters and will stop at the first thing it hits. -What is meant by thing? please explain in the Ability description or in the strength.

    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - Caused great stain on the arm that does this move and is unable to use that limb for 2 posts. -would this not effect your stats?
    - User Stumbles back after the attack is released and cant respond the post after use. -Why is the user unable to respond after use after stumbling backwards? please explain in the Ability description or in the strength. Also please change the word respond to move
    - User cant defend or attack after use -this weakness is basically the same as the one above it please change it

    Ability Lvl 1 Name: Crippling strike
    Ability Lvl 1 Type: melee Close range (0-3 meters)
    Ability Lvl 1 Cooldown: can only use once per thread after use. -please remove the after use part.
    Ability Lvl 1 Description: The user strikes with the last of there strength to destroy there opponent. -can I have more of a description of what happens?
    Ability Lvl 1 Strengths:
    - User swings with all there might. (+10 Strength)
    - User can pierce though heavy armor.
    - User can pierce though steel.
    Ability Lvl 1 Weaknesses:
    - User takes great strain on her body that cause high amounts of fatigue that cause the use not to be able move for the rest of the thread after use. -10 endurance.
    - This Move breaks the user's arm after use from striking with all there might. (User must write a recovery thread on there ship or in a room where its a safe place to do this with at least 500 words Or if someone joins in say the ships doctor then the user must write at least 200 words for each post.)
    - User cannot use this for a first attack in a PVP thread it needs to be used after 5 or more posts.


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